Thursday, March 1, 2012
Writing an article Marianna
Since I was a child I loved swimming. I always wathed competitions on television an I wanted to be an athlete. But it's really difficult to realize. For the moment, I prefer swimming and I hope that in the future, I'll improve my technique. I practice swimming since 2010 and so I could learn an hard technique. Swimming is a good training for your body, is relaxing and enjoyable. It makes me think of summer , beach , friends , sun ... I suggest practice this sport. Moreover it can be a good way for make new friends.
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You do need some revision - present perfect simple vs continuous
ReplyDelete- since I was a child I have loved ...
- I have always watched ..
- I wanted to be an athlete (when you were a child only?? or do you still want to be one?)
- to realize vb tr : something
- I've been practising swimming since ..
- spelling: and
- suggest practising (suggest +vbing)
The tone of this article is nice and positive - the reader would certainly be "informed" about how you feel about swimming, which means that the task achievement element of your score would be high.
ReplyDeleteA couple of points to add to the important ones already made above:
Very important - this is only one paragraph! In the exam you would automatically drop down a band for doing this so do try to get into the habit of dividing essays into several paragraphs. It really is important.
Practise swimming" would mean repeating the same swimming exercise again and again to improve. I think you mean "go swimming".
"Have been able to learn" rather than "could learn". We only use "could" in the past for individual situations if it's in the negative. e.g. "The door shut and I couldn't open it." but "The door shut but I was able to (or I managed to) open it." However, with longer-lasting things such as skills and abilities "could" is fine, e.g. "I could speak Japanese when I was five."
...training for your body. IT is relaxing....(You need a subject here.)
It makes me think of summer, THE beach, (MY) friends, THE sun...
...a good way TO MAKE new friends.
Well done. I look forward to seeing the next writing.