Hi Anne,
Thanks for your e-mail. I'm very happy for you. Maybe I can give you some help.
I think the best time to come here is in the summer because the weather is sunny and you can do some acrivities, too.
If you want to meet young people I suggest you doing afternoon activities , for example volleyball , swimming...
You should bring only a t-shirt , a pair of shorts and trainers.
Thanks for your invitation. I'll try to stay with you all the time because I want to show you my prefer places. I want to see you again.
Write soon
Mary
Hi Marianna,
ReplyDeletenot too bad ..Please note:
- suggest + vb ing (suggest doing ..or suggest you do)
- I'll try my best to spend lots of time with you
- my favourite places
This e-mail reads naturally and the tenses and paragraphing are appropriate.
ReplyDeleteA few points to think about:
It would be good to see the actual task because I'm not sure where the "invitation" fits in. Who was inviting who?
Careful about spelling - "activities".
If you're making a list like here "volleyball, swimming..." it's better to say something like "and so on" or "volleyball OR swimming" rather than just stop in mid-sentence.
In letters and e-mails in the exam, it's often a good idea to make a reference to the original points that you are answering. Firstly it shows you have understood them and highlights that you are answering them, secondly it reads smoothly and thirdly it helps to make sure you have covered all the required points as you can tick them off. So here you could say something like," In your letter (e-mail?) you mention coming to visit. I think the best time is...." You could also give more detail about WHY you are happy for her, etc.
The style is fine and the language appropriate for the task.