Dear
Caroline,
Thanks for
your letter and the fantastic photos that you sent me ! I was really pleased to
receive these information. I’ve always loved Australia and I wouldn’t lose the
opportunity to meet you and visit the country! When the camp will start? Can
you give me all the school calendar ?
I would
study English and local History because
when I’ll arrive at home I’d like to be prepared for my English school exams and I’d love to
know all the curiosities of yours culture.
How much
the courses will cost? And are there any scholarships? Could you possibly send
me the modules of the program ?
I’m
interested to see the Great Barrier Reef because the photos and the descriptions
of the place are enchanting and I would try through the same beautiful
experience that my friends have already done.
I hope you answer soon,
best wishes
Your Debbie.
Hi Debora,
ReplyDeleteSincere apologies for the delay in commenting. Things have been particularly busy for the last couple of months but am trying my best to get up to date.
Unfortunately I don't have the full question that you were answering but, judging from what you and your colleagues have all written, this letter seems to deal fully with the task. It is well laid out in the correct format for a letter of this type and you have expanded sufficiently on your comments. Well done.
To deal specifically with each point:
- this information (not these). Information is an uncountable noun.
- I've always loved Australia is great in itself. The only thing is that it sounds as if you have been there before. If you don't want to say this then "I've always been attracted by/interested in Australia" would suit.
- wouldn't miss the opportunity of meeting you and visiting...(to is ok but of + ing is more usual)
- I would choose to/like to study...
- when I return home. With if, when, as soon as etc we use a present tense followed by a future tense, just like first conditional.
- what do you mean by "school calendar?" Do you mean the time-table for the courses or maybe you could say the school programme?
- my school English exams means it's a normal school where you also study English; my English school exams means it's a school just for English language.
- Question-forming: you need to change the word order for both "When will the camp start?" and "How much will the courses cost?"
- I'm interested in seeing...
- I'm not sure but I think you mean "would like to have the same beautiful experience that my friends have already had."
- I hope you answer soon is ok but probably more common would be "I look forward to hearing from you soon."
- Yours (with an 's') Debbie.
Altogether, the letter deals completely with the task (as far as I can see not having the question wording) and is well organised and appropriate. Well done.
Best regards,
Sherry
Thanks Sherry for your help,I understand all my mistakes and I'll try to don't make them again.
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