Your Australian friend, Caroline, has recently sent you this email. Read her email and the notes you have made on it. Then write an email to Caroline using all of your notes.
Dear Caroline,
it's nice to hear from you. I'm very glad you have immediately thought of me! Of course I'm interested in coming there in Australia to share this amazing experience in an educational summer camp! Can I possibly know when exactly the camp is going to start?
I would like to study marine Biology because of the breathtaking sea bottoms that you can find in Australia ! And also because I'm really impressed by undersea life.
How much is the camp?
How to say not to do a trip together.. I would absolutely prefer to visit the Great Barrier Reef because of the reasons that I have written before.
I can't wait to come! Let me know some more details about that..
Love, Caroline
Hi Caroline,
ReplyDeleteAs I mentioned in my post on your colleague's letter, profuse apologies for taking so long to comment. This year has got off to a very busy start but I am doing my best to get up to date.
As I also said to your colleague, I don't actually have a copy of the question wording but, judging from the way all three of you have answered, I think I can guess sufficiently well, in which case this letter fully answers the question. The language is good (you could possibly expand a little??) Well done.
Dealing specifically with each point:
- You need to begin with a capital letter even though it's after a comma! "It's..."
- coming there to Australia
- Can (or could) you possibly let me know
- I think I would use "sea-beds" rather than "bottoms" which just sounds a little strange to us.
- I wouldn't finish the sentence after "Australia" but would put a comma and continue "and ...".
- "How to say not to do a trip together" doesn't work. Possibly "Of course I would love to do a trip together" or "Why would I not want to do a ....?"
- I would prefer or I would absolutely love to visit. You can't put absolutely with prefer here.
- for the reasons I have written/given above.
- some more details about it.
A good letter and dealing directly with the task (as far as I can see, as I said). Well done.
Best regards,
Sherry.